The First Commute

I’ve had a lot of firsts this year.  I couldn’t tell if I was nervous with excitement or fear.  I hadn’t set an alarm clock since high school.  A solid breakfast and a lunchbox hadn’t been my morning routine either.   I used to jog to work, but that would be a ten-hour jog at six mph.  I slumped into the driver’s seat and reluctantly started my commute.  Preoccupied with new job jitters, I rounded the corner.  The panorama that revealed itself made me involuntarily gasp.  The contrasting beauty of nature, black and white, delicate pink, sky blue;  a commute that will never lose the awe-inspiring, God-like appeal.

Photo credit belongs to Douglas McIlroy



  1. Madison Woods said,

    June 2, 2012 at 11:57 am

    I’d say what a fantasy-job your mc must have to have a commute like that, haha, but it could very well be a real description of what Doug sees every evening!

    • Prosing On said,

      June 2, 2012 at 12:00 pm

      Funny you should say that. I googled him and the title of the shot “On the road to work” so I would know where the shot originated to help fuel a story. I said, “Self, where do you know that name from. Doug McIlroy, Doug McIlroy…” Couldn’t come up with it. So I just used the title. Blonde as they come! lol

  2. June 2, 2012 at 7:16 am

    Can you imagine getting to see that every morning? And it’s true, we want to know what the job is. The jitters and the view are so intriguing. Are you going to work on the Hadron Collider? An archaeologic dig? So many possibilities in the morning light.


  3. Kwadwo said,

    June 2, 2012 at 2:41 am

    A lot of descriptive words to help the reader’s imagination along.
    Interesting read.

    Here’s my story:

  4. Nifti said,

    June 1, 2012 at 12:48 pm

    Good Job! 🙂

  5. Brian Benoit said,

    June 1, 2012 at 10:03 am

    The simple description of the colors is what hit me here: “black and white, delicate pink, sky blue” — I thought it was nice how it captured the impression of the photo without describing the actual objects in it. Nice job!

    Brian (

  6. erinleary said,

    June 1, 2012 at 9:36 am

    I wish I could say the same about my commute! I enjoyed this.

    mine is here:

  7. judeayres said,

    June 1, 2012 at 9:28 am

    A slap in the face by nature. Nothing like a little perspective to set us right.

    My first go at this whole thing:

  8. dbfurches said,

    June 1, 2012 at 5:04 am

    Thanks for posting this story. It reminds me of drives on the Blue Ridge Parkway. Here’s mine:

  9. dmmacilroy said,

    June 1, 2012 at 4:28 am

    Had to smile at this one because that IS my commute. Lovely story. You nailed it.



    • prosingon said,

      June 1, 2012 at 8:30 am

      I am such a blonde (literally and figuratively). When I saw the prompt I immediately went to Google to try and figure out where this shot was taken. I kept thinking, “Doug McIlroy, Doug McIlroy, why do I know that name?” I googled you, then the title of the photo to get some inspiration for a story line pretaining to the location, to no avail. Then, because of the title of the shot, what I should write became clear. Thanks for commenting.

  10. Linda said,

    June 1, 2012 at 12:07 am

    Now that’s a way to really get the ‘love your job’ feeling and you summed it all up really well, the feelings and the sight. Well done. Here’s mine for perusal:

  11. rainang said,

    May 31, 2012 at 7:42 pm

    I really liked how you captured the picture in this neatly packed paragraph while leaving it open for more to come 🙂

  12. May 31, 2012 at 6:39 pm

    I like the way that you used the photo title for your inspiration. It makes me wonder what sort of work the character does and where she is going. Mine’s at if you want to have a look.

  13. TheOthers1 said,

    May 31, 2012 at 5:28 pm

    Yes. You described that beautifully. Stopped by nature right in one’s tracks. Nice job.

    My attempt:

  14. May 31, 2012 at 9:46 am

    Well done…makes you want more! Will there be more???

    Here’s mine, if you’re interested:

    • prosingon said,

      May 31, 2012 at 10:24 am

      I have been tinkering with the idea that these Flash Fiction and 100 WCGU challenges are great ways to get juices flowing for full length stories. So far I’ve been using them as brain pilates. Thanks for taking the time to comment, much appreciated.

      • May 31, 2012 at 11:29 am

        I haven’t had one yet to stretch into a full story, but I know what you mean. A lot of the ones that I read feel like pieces to something larger. I love that! Makes me wonder what’s next or what came before.

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